Attemping to translate the song "Alright"

Question

Given that some look like that don't understand the importance of macros here is some reference by ScorpioMartinus where explains that speaking Latin without their macros is like speaking German without their umlauts, or Spanish without their accents.

The English lyrics of the song can be found here. Can I please have feedback on the translation?

Sentiens ut sís solus
In hóc locó quó appellás domus
Sentiens ut nón sit locus ad proficiscendum
Sentiens ut nón possís aliquid esse

Sentiens ut habeás néminem plús [Not sure how translate this line]
Tot quod habes est paenitentia tua
Atque errorés tués et memoriae tuae
Sed quod nón vídes

Est quod eris sufficiens bonus
Nóli languére té

Nam es nón indignus [I may prefer using aestimo or axia with double negation, double negation must be perserved]
Némo est perfectus
Permané fortis manéque pugnam
Eris sufficiens bonus

Ergó sumé manum meam
Hoc nón est ipse fínis
Permané fortis manéque pugnam
Eris sufficiens bonus

Sentís ut sís assecutus
Turbine cruciatús
Máiore cónáris hat nullus pondus [Really not idea of how translate this line]
Simpleciter nón potes proficiscí

Simpleciter vís exíre
Vís rés tués sùmere íreque
Sed quod nón scis

Est quod eris sufficiens bonus
Nóli languére té

Nam es nón indignus
Némo est perfectus
Permané fortis manéque pugnam
Eris sufficiens bonus

Ergó sumé manum meam
Hoc nón est ipse fínis

Permané fortis manéque pugnam
Eris sufficiens bonus

Nón es gutta fenestrá
Sí langués pollicor recordábor

Nam es nón indignus
Némo est perfectus
Permané fortis manéque pugnam
Eris sufficiens bonus

Ergó sumé manum meum
Hoc nón est ipse fínis

Permané fortis manéque pugnam
Eris sufficiens bonus
Erit sufficiens bonus

Answer 1

It's hard to say too much, really. As in your other question, what you've come up with largely represents an attempt at word-for-word vocabulary replacement rather than true translation, and therefore has all the limitations of that approach.

Still, I'll note just a couple of things of a more mechanical nature:

• The 4 occurrences of the participle sentiens have no syntactical connection to anything.
• Quo dicis domus would mean, if anything, either 'where you speak of houses' (though this would require a macron over the u) or 'where you, a house, speak.' Both quo and domus need to be accusative (singular) here.
• If I saw locus ad proficiscendum, I'd assume it's supposed to mean 'opportunity for setting out (on a journey)', not a way of rendering 'no where to run.' I don't think a gerund (or the verb proficisci) is what you want here. (I myself would probably say something like locus ad quem [or locus quo] fugias here.)
• Assequocutus is not a word (I think you mean assecutus).
• Tues is not a correct form of the possessive adjective.
• Tace manum meam would mean 'be silent about my hand,' not 'take my hand.'
• Mane pugnam would mean 'wait for the fight,' not 'keep the fight' (whatever that even means).
• Languere is intransitive, making languere te ungrammatical.
• The word is simpliciter, not simpleciter.
• You appear to be using sufficiens as an adverb, which it isn't.